Wednesday, 1 April 2015
school picnic
Write a recount about going on our School Picnic
Use the plan below to organise your writing. Choose some of the vocab
Make sure you have effective sentences.
When you have finished copy and paste your writing onto your blog and add a photo : Class Site - Media - Picnic - Take a screenshot
Copy and paste our L.O.s as well
L.I. EFFECTIVE PARAGRAPH (Highlighted Main Focus)
⚈ Start with a topic sentence.
⚈ Have at least 2-3 connected sentences.
⚈ Have sentences that are effective with
. (a) varied beginnings, (b) juicy vocab e.g action/descriptive words (c) grammatically correct
(d) punctuated correctly.
⚈ Have a variety of sentence types/lengths/complexities
(e.g. speech,exclamation,statement/simple/complex/short/long.)
Exemplar
Interesting Beginnings
Time:
First thing
In the morning
After
During
Before long
Finally
Suddenly
As soon as
To start with
Next
Manner/How:
With excitement
Trying my best
Looking carefully I
Quickly
Seeing
Luckily
Feeling
Place:
Sitting under
Standing beside
Looking out to sea
With the sun shining
Down on the sand
Hook/Introduction: Paragraph 1 (to hook your reader in then to give them enough information so they know what you are writing about)
When: Friday, cloudy, overcast day
Who: Point England School
Where The Point
Why: to have a school picnic
On friday there was a school picnic for point england school and it was at point england reserve and it was a beach and it was a cloudy day.my class geted to play in the water when it was our time and there was a sand caselt building contest.
Paragraph 2: Your favourite activity. Choose 1 only!
explained the rules
slippery slimy gluggy clay
molded the clay
energetic game of
(Action Words - Volleyball, Touch, Soccer, Cricket) threw, tossed, sprinted, challenged, dodged, returned,
(Action Words - Swimming) splashed, bombed, shivered, waded, squealed,
Karaoke - nervous, waited patiently, in pairs, performed,
There was someone that gave me there clay and I wanted more clay but it was a long walk there was a place on the beach to get clay. when I was at there I got some more clay and rubbed it in the water to make it all slimy and stick them together.
Paragraph 3: Your 2nd favourite activity. Choose 1 only!
I geted to swim in the water and it was fun in the water I could not go far because we would druon so the teachers showed us how far we could go.
Paragraph 4: Conclusion
How you felt about the picnic,
I felt excited about the picnic and I had so much fun but we had to leave and go back to point england school and go to back home.
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